I am writing an essay right now and need some help

....harmonized agreement so it is win win for both parties....

the part in question is win win. Is that proper grammar?

 

im gonna have to second that

 

...harmonized agreement, beneficial for both parties...

 

yeah it does sound better

how about a word for lose lose

 

would help with the sentence you're using it in

 

"It is not beneficial for either party"

 

When a crime goes though the courts it is a lose, lose situation for both parties whereas when a crime goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement it is beneficial for both parties...

 

When a crime goes though the courts, benefiting neither party, whereas when a crime goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement it is beneficial for both parties...

 

too many beneficials.

 

When a crime goes though the courts, favoring neither party, whereas when a crime goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement it is beneficial for both parties...

better?

 

when a case goes through the court system neither the victim nor the offender benefiet, whereas a case that proceeds through a restorative justice forum can benefit both by allowing them to come to a harmonized agreement. i think that sounds pretty good

 

When a crime goes through the courts it is beneficial for neither party, whereas when a crime goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement it is beneficial for both parties.

?

 

When a crime goes through the courts it is beneficial for neither party, whereas when a crime goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement, it is beneficial for both parties.

 

i would use case instead of crime, i also think you should define both parties before reffering to them. kinda like you wouldnt say he before you say Mr smith.

 

what do you guys think 1 or 2?


1 - when a case goes through the court system neither the victim nor the offender benefiet, whereas a case that proceeds through a restorative justice forum can benefit both by allowing them to come to a harmonized agreement.

or

2 - When a case goes through the courts it is beneficial for neither party, whereas when a case goes through a restorative justice forum where both the victim and offender come to the harmonized agreement, it is beneficial for both parties.





I also have victim and offender in the sentence right before.... I agree on the "case" rather than "crime"


so 1 or 2?